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XIA - FLOWER

4.25.2014

100 Theme Challenge #5

5. Break Away


The club was lousy and heavy, filled with men all focused on one thing: the women. They were onstage or on some of the men's laps, dancing their meaningless pay away. Their eyes were glazed; their mind, gone.
He looked around, made his way to the bar to order a beer. He seated himself before searching for the one he had come for. It was so hot in there, he loosened his tie while taking a gulp of the amber liquid.

She came to him. Red shiny lipstick and underwear. Her green eyes were away, lost in her own daydream.
"Hey, sweety. Come for a dance?" She asked, caressing his clothed arm.

"Sure, in a private room," he smirked cheekily, eying her up and down. She smiled. "Sure."

He quickly paid for the drink and followed her in the back, where she led him through a small and badly lightened hall to a small room with a cozy chair in the middle. He sat down and watched her expectantly. She chuckled, fingers twitching, before she put some music and began to dance. He never let his eyes leave her, following her curves and moves with attention. She approached him to sway her hips on his lap.

"What if I told you it's possible for you to leave this place?" He stated quietly, his hand going against her cheek to make her look at him. She immediately took a step back.

"No touching." She went, with huge eyes.

"Did you hear what I said, Inga? I could bring you to a safe place." He slowly stood, hands turned upwards to let her know he meant no harm.

"My name is Ruby, not Inga."

"Your real name is Inga, you were kidnapped two years ago and brought here to work for a man named 
Anton."

The women were also controlled by some drug he had yet to identify, as there wasn't any trace of it elsewhere.

"You have to leave, Mister." Now the woman stopped the music and showed him the door. "Anton won't be happy if he learns of all the things you said to me. Anton will…" She stammered, her body swinging forward. The man could only catch her. She was shaking like a leaf. Obviously Anton would do something to punish her, even though there was no fault from her part.

"Nobody will harm you if you accept to leave with me, darling, I promise you. You'll be safe."

"Safe? I don't… I don't remember what that feels like anymore." She accepted his coat around her frail shoulders.

"You only have to say the word, and we're out of here. The other girls will also be freed, and Anton's business will be brought down."

She looked into his eyes, a flicker of hope dancing on her face.

"Who are you?"

He smiled. "I'm a friend. I help people who need it."

He readjusted his grip on her and put her back on her feet. His senses awoke in alertness as he felt something break free in her.


"Then bring me away, please," she finally stated, her mouth set.

2 commentaires:

  1. J'ai vraiment beaucoup aimé, et ça m'impressionne comment tu réussis à créer un univers et une ambiance en si peu de mots! C'est comme ça avec toutes tes shorts stories, dès les premières lignes on est plongés dans l'histoire et dans un endroit précis avec une histoire précise. C'est vraiment un grand talent que t'as de pouvoir faire une histoire aussi poignante même si elle ne dure que quelques lignes <3

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    1. Aww merci! ^_^' Le truc est d'introduire l'histoire comme si c'était en plein milieu, et de rajouter des points précis pour situer les gens sans trop les encombrer dans les détails. Et l'imagination se charge du reste. :P

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